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1、雅思写作提高之雅思7分大作范文批改与解析 给大家带来了雅思写作提高之雅思7分大作范文批改与解析,一起来学习一下吧,下面就和大家分享,来欣赏一下吧。雅思写作提高之:雅思7分大作范文批改与解析雅思写作提高第一步:结构(5.0 - 5.5)问题:出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)同学:One reason for those who decide to go overseas to get a higher degree is that they believe they can get better education
2、in certain fields. That is to say, different universities in different countries have their specialized courses and rich resources can be provided according to their needs and requirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that liv
3、ing in an all-round English environment and being affected by local culture make people quick learners.解析:出国留学和高学历完全是两回事(出去读初中和高中都算出国);出国就是better education,在国内就不是better? 出国留学可不仅仅是上大学,而该同学认为出国留学就是去上大学的(因为她可能就是去上大学的,所以觉得所有人也都如此),偏激。此外,第四句论述变成了英语环境了(因为大家都去英语国家,所以主观认为,所有出国的人就是去学英语的),再次带来了内容偏激。大家找问题的时候是不
4、是去找语法或者词汇使用上面的错误了?对,很多时候大家认为自己写的没什么问题(毕竟词汇和语法没少使用),分数低会归类到“压分”。那么在感受一下5.5分的原因真是词汇或者语法问题吗?考官看不懂,就是看不懂;唯一看懂的就是结构还算完整,所以5.0 - 5.5分。雅思写作提高第二步:逻辑(6.0 - 6.5)逻辑部分的主要得分点有两个:一个是观点的准确性;一个是论证方法的灵活使用。我们根据刚才的5.0 - 5.5分的*,进一步感受一下有了逻辑的内容有什么区别。问题:出国留学的优点(the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)Tim老师改:One re
5、ason for those who decide to go overseas for study is that they believe they can have access to different educational resources. That is to say, different countries have different educational system, and they can provide people with their specialized courses and rich resources to their needs and req
6、uirements. Another reason is that they can learn a foreign language in a more efficient way. There is no denying that living in a foreign environment and being affected by local culture make people learn a language more quickly.解析:Tim老师通过修改了上面同学的问题,把内容变得更准确、有说服力。所以,5.5 - 6.0分的一个最佳提分方式就是学会总结归纳自己要说的内容
7、;否则,只是通过词汇或者语法是很难提高分数的(大家可以感受一下自己当下的学习方式就知道了)。雅思写作第三步:语言(7+)小站雅思君进一步给大家感受一下7.0分的标准又和上面的内容有什么区别。问题:出国留学的优点 (the advantages of disadvantages of study abroad)On one hand, people can have access to different educational resources when they pursue their study in another country. It is self-evident that e
8、veryone would choose a place that offers a more competitive and better education in certain field as the destination for their overseas studies. This explains the reason why bunches of young people flood into some countries for further their study, such as America or Germany. Under this circumstance
9、, students will receive many materials that are more up-to-date and teachers can provide them with the latest development in their fields that differs from others.解析:一段只围绕一个观点做展开论述。通过强调论证、解释论证、递进句等不同论证方法来解释观点:出国留学可以让人们获取不同的教育资源。并且语言使用准确且多样,层层递进。所以,从段落的逻辑性、紧密型以及语言使用的多样性还有准确性上面都符合7分标准。2018年7月21日雅思写作真题
10、回忆及范文题目为Some businesses find that new employees who just finish their education lack basic interpersonal ability such as work with others as a part of team.雅思小作文类型:流程图题目 The diagram shows the how recycled paper is made雅思大作文类型:社会类题目:Some businesses find that new employees who just finish their educat
11、ion lack basic interpersonal ability such as work with others as a part of team.What do you think the causes of this problem?And how to solve this?范文来自雅思哥:Despite the high level of knowledge, employers today have found that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills needed in an office envi
12、ronment. This essay will analyze the main reason leading to the problem and offer some potential solutions to it.People with interpersonal skills are the people who can vary how they act and what they contribute. They notice the strengths and weaknesses of their group, and they adapt. However, schoo
13、ls and colleges or universities have failed to equip students with such applied skills. Instead, students are encouraged to focus on their academic subjects exclusively, because they are only evaluated by their academic performance which is essential to receiving an academic qualification. Unfortuna
14、tely, many of them have turned into information recipients who acquire the knowledge in a passive way without truly developing abilities and skills required in today s job market. For high schools, educators should think more about how students are learning, rather than just what they are learning.
15、Teaching should reflect the richness of real-life interactions, and to give students experience in the kinds of settings that are going to be useful to them when they leave school. Assignments and curricula should integrate opportunities to work collaboralively. Group projects, for example, are valu
16、able learning opportunities.In the higher education sphere, professors and administrators should encourage students to seek out real-world experiences. Colleges and universities could ask students to work cotlaboratively in the classroom and pursue internships and volunteer opportunities outside of
17、it. Students should also look for critical growth opportunities within their extracurncular activities, rather than just viewing them as resume-fillers.To conclude, jobs requiring high levels of social interaction are growing. In order to help graduates better prepare for their future career, change
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