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1、雅思写作5.5都是因为假大空 雅思写作5.5 都是因为假大空?一起来看看吧，下面就和大家分享，来欣赏一下吧。雅思写作5.5 都是因为假大空?雅思写作一直是让备考雅思的同学们头疼的老大难问题。烤鸭们受中文写作思维惯性的影响，习惯把*的开篇写得很华丽，但一大段话绕来绕去却并没有进入主题，导致作文成绩不理想。仔细分析原因是因为内容文不对题、开头冗长、言之无物，未能按照题目的要求进行描述、归纳或论述。那在写作中怎么才能处理掉“通篇内容空洞”这样的顽疾呢?今天就带你揭晓答案。“内容”重要还是“语言”重要?相信不少烤鸭都存在这样的误区：雅思是一门语言考试，所以雅思写作考的是语言，而不是内容。今天要告诉大家
2、的是，这个想法绝对是错误的!很多同学语言基础很不错，对单词和语法的掌握都很熟练，然而最后写作成绩却并不满意。这些*缺乏实质性的内容。在雅思写作的评分标准中，第一项就是“写作任务的回应情况(Task Response)”，要求*要有“清晰的观点、切题的论点、充分的论证”。也就是说，考官是非常重视*的内容是否有逻辑且充实的，这会决定我们整篇*分数的一个上限。写作中的假、大、空1、写作中的“假”内容就是让读者看起来觉得很假，没有说服力的内容。有些同学为了节约备考的时间，背诵了一些万能的、语言表达非常好的论点论据，在*中直接默写套用。这样的内容如果没有办法充分证明论点，或者语言和自己写的部分差距极大的
3、话，很容易让读者看出来是背诵的内容。这样问题的出现，主要是因为同学们对雅思写作要求不够了解。在上文中提到过，写作的评分不会只关注语言，内容的切题也是一个重要评分项。同学们会因被读者看出来的“背诵性内容”而扣分。2、写作中的“大”论点很多中国同学喜欢用看起来很宏大的一些论点，比如“体育能完善人格”，“艺术能陶冶情操”，但是用这样的论点进行论证有两点不好。第一，“人格”和“情操”这种涵盖意思过广的中文名词没有非常精准的英文翻译，很多同学使用的词汇不能完全表达自己本来的意思。第二，雅思大作文篇幅有限，一个论点下面的论证过程一般在50-70个单词之间，同学们没有办法在段篇幅内把这种包含意思很广的内容解
4、释清楚。这都会影响读者对*的理解，无法做到有效的沟通。同学们爱用宏大论点的原因，也是大部分受之前写作习惯的影响。很多同学之前写作文习惯了“劈情操”，但是雅思作文是在“讲道理”，其实就是在短篇幅内，有效合理地证明自己的观点，道理讲得越清楚，越是好的*。3、写作中“空洞”的表达空洞的表达就是缺乏有效且具体论证的内容。很多同学会在论据的部分出现很多无效的和重复性内容，也就是非常典型的“车轱辘话”。如 “Watching television could enrich students general knowledge. The reason is that they spend a great d
5、eal of time seeing various programs, which makes them more knowledgeable about the world. For example, when a child watches television alone at home, he or she could have access to different information, thus having an encyclopedic knowledge about many things. ”这位同学为了证明看电视可以丰富小孩知识，在这段论证过程写了三句话，而这三句话
6、的意思是一模一样的，这么写从内容和语言方面都有问题。1、从内容方面来说，后面的重复性内容不能被作为 evidence 来支撑前面的论点，没有说服力。2、从语言方面，这段论证过程里面用到了 “the reasons is that”, “for example” 等表示不同逻辑关系的连接词，但是*中的 “the reasons is that” 后面连接的不是愿意，“for example” 后面连接的也不是例子，这相当于连接词的选择和使用也有问题。空洞的论证过程原因在于学生的积累不够以及没有具体化的意识。其实很多同学的复习不够充分，没有把该刷的话题刷过一遍，导致有些话题在考场上完全没有思路，只
7、能把和主题有关的词汇和句型都堆砌在一起。还有些同学对很多话题的常识也缺乏一定的了解，比如建设基础设施 build infrastructure 的作用，很多同学只能想到“便民”，根本不知道基础设施对促进经济的极大作用，导致扩展不够，也只能用重复内容来凑。此外，没有将内容具体化的意识和训练也会导致空洞的论证过程。比如刚才的那段文字，可以在很多内容上进行具体的细化展开。如 “Watching television could enrich students general knowledge.(哪些知识) The reason is that they spend a great deal of
8、time seeing various programs(哪些节目), which makes them more knowledgeable about the world. For example, when a child watches television alone at home, he or she could have access to different information(哪些信息), thus having an encyclopedic knowledge about many things. (哪些事情)”如何开展“有效的论证”?想要避免出现上述“假、大、空”
9、的内容，需要同学们进行一段时间的备考和训练，准备工作中主要需要注意2个方面：1、对话题的了解及相关素材的积累;2、对论证过程的训练。雅思大作文由多个话题构成，同学们可以根据以往考试题目将话题进行归类，如政府类、教育类、科技类等;然后按照不同的话题准备相关的常识和素材，确保拿到题目有话可说。此外，论证的训练也是有必要的，同学们可以学习常见的论证方法，如因果论证、解释论证、假设论证等，在平日练习时加以应用，让考试中写出的*充实有逻辑。亚马逊销毁滞销品 国际贸易是否益与环境保护近日，亚马逊销毁滞销品一事被曝出。网友惊讶其浪费物资的同时，也有专家指出亚马逊销毁滞销品的行为严重威胁了 人类健康，对地球环
10、境造成污染。亚马逊创始人杰夫贝索斯因伪善和“破坏地球”的做法而被指责。这一事件可以运用于同学们的雅思写作中，比如在讨论国际贸易是否影响环境的雅思写作话题中，我们可巧妙将亚马逊销毁滞销品一事与此相连。下面是国际贸易与环境保护相关写作模板，大家可参考运用。Some people think international cooperation has brought benefits to world environment protection, while some people think more benefits have been brought to international bus
11、iness. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.雅思大作文模板范文参考：It is noticeable that multinational cooperation has become increasingly common, and it makes contribution to global integration instead of international isolation. Some people claim that the primary merit of international cooperation is
12、 protecting the environment while others argue that the major strength is promoting worldwide business. Before present my position, the essay aims to critically discuss both views.It is no doubt that environmental protection needs the global efforts. In order to find an effective solution to polluti
13、on, governments from all over the world have to make stricter laws and regulations on the emission of polluted substances. Furthermore, international cooperation makes it possible for scientists to launch research seminars to exchange their diverse and innovative ideas, from which they may gain the
14、inspiration to design more clean energy like wind and solar energy and address environmental problems.International integration plays an indispensable role in developing prosperous business, which support the other sides opinion. On the one hand, with the help of advanced technology and professional
15、 skills offered by developed nations, developing countries become capable of harnessing adequate resources and achieving the goal of maximizing business profits as soon as possible. On the other hand, more employment opportunities are created on the products-supply sides and a better quality of life
16、 is shared by skill-receiving ends. Admittedly, without economic collaboration on such a massive scale, a huge number of countries would be likely to be embroiled in starvation except for the few blessed with fertile lands and wise governmental leadership.Judging from the detailed analysis on both s
17、ides, I think both aspects are extremely significant during the process of propelling global progress. However, it is high time that multinational collaboration paid more attention to environmental issues to catch up with the pace of global business development.雅思写作中表达利弊观点的100个通用模板60条通用优点1. offer a
18、sense of job satisfaction andsecurity 带来工作的满意感和安全感2. lay a solid professional working experience 积累扎实的工作经验3. reduce/cut down expenditure 削减支出4. increase/generate job opportunities 创造就业机会5. meet/satisfy personalized needs 满足人性化的需求6. promote talent introduction and exchange 促进人才的引进与交流7. keep skills fr
19、esh and up-to-date 保证技术的不落伍8. better/promote/enhance/further human resource development 完善人力资源的发展9. lay a solid foundation for 奠定坚实的基础10. pave the way for the future/development 为未来铺平了道路11. foster a sense of competition and cooperation 培养合作感与竞争感12. cultivate the spirit of team working 培养团队合作精神13. ma
20、ster interpersonal skills 掌握人及关系技巧14. widen ones knowledge 拓宽知识面15. enrich ones social and life experience 丰富社会与人生经历16. enlarge ones view/broaden ones horizon 拓宽视野17. realize the value of life 实现人生价值18. surmount/overcome/win over /master difficulties 克服困难19. grasp good communication skills 掌握人际交流技巧2
21、0. remove misunderstanding and discrimination 消除误解与歧视21. keep balance between work and family 保持事业与家庭的平衡22. raise the standard of living提高生活水平23. penetrate every corner of our life and be impressive 贯穿生活的每一个角落而且是印象深刻的24. improve cultural integration and globalization促进文化的整合与全球化25. enrich peoples spi
22、ritual life 丰富人们的精神生活26. promote social skills and competence 提高社交技巧与能力27. strengthen the family ties促进家庭团结28. cultivate a strong sense of responsibility 培养强烈的责任感29. bring joys and comforts to sb带来愉悦与舒适30. usher in a brand-new life-style引入全新的生活方式31. relieve the pressure of 缓解压力32. maintain the commu
23、nity stability 保持社会的稳定33. improve the utilization rate of energy resources提高能源的利用率34. make full use of充分利用35. satisfy peoples needs/meet the demands of people 满足人们的需求36. promote the development of relative industries促进相关产业的发展37. stimulate domestic needs刺激国内需求38. impel economic development促进经济的发展39.
24、generate jobs, income and tax revenues扩大就业机会，提高收入40. enhance mutual understanding促进相互的理解41. boost local development促进当地的发展42. promote cultural exchange and cooperation促进文化的交流与合作43. enrich ones experience of life 丰富人生经历44. strengthen the ties with outside world加强与外面世界的联系45. realize the sustainable de
25、velopment ofresources实现能源的可持续发展46. foster a climate of peace and prosperity营造和平繁荣的气氛47. stimulate our feelings of togetherness 激发团结48. maintain a natural balance 保持自然平衡49. reduce the labor intensity 降低劳动强度50. stimulate ones imagination and interest in sth 刺激人们的想象里与兴趣51. accelerate the flow of inform
26、ation 加速信息的流动52. provide more business opportunities 提供商机53. increase the productivity 提高生产力54. create more opportunities for education 创造受教育的机会55. improve educational conditions 改善教育条件56. release people from hard manual work 使人们从繁重的体力劳动中解脱出来57. speed up technical innovation 加速技术革新58. better the dev
27、elopment of human society 完善人力资源的发展59. promote the social inclusion 提高社会的包容度60. bring immeasurable economic benefits 带来巨大的经济效益40条通用弊端1. put sb or sth at risk 使冒风险2. be a serious setback for the career development对职业发展是一个严重的挫折3. be lack of a sense of job security 缺乏工作的安全感4. distract sb from doing sth
28、 是某人从某事中分心5. impose a heave strain on 带来巨大的压力6. be exaggerated and cheating 夸大且欺骗的7. be the invasion of privacy 侵犯隐私8. violate rights of free speech侵犯言论自由的权利9. endanger social stability and safety 危害到社会的稳定与安全10. restrain sb from doing 限制某人做某事11. arouse resistances in the public 引发公众的对立12. be very or
29、thodox in ones behavior 行为正统13. be incompatible with the present work与当前的工作不融合14. go astray 误入歧途15. undermine local culture 破环当地文化16. jeopardize the safety and stability of the society 破坏社会的安全与稳定17. set a bad example to 树立坏的榜样18. lead to the extinction of some species 导致一些物种的灭绝19. result in shortage
30、 of energy and natural resources导致能源的短缺20. be irreparable and irreversible damage 不可修复性的破环21. to cause the estrangement/isolation/alienation between A and B 导致了 A与B之间的疏远22. bring disgrace on sb 为带来耻辱23. suffer heavy losses 损失惨重24. easily cause stress-related illnesses 容易导致与压力相关的疾病25. lack basic infr
31、astructures 缺乏基础设施26. break the ecological balance 破环生态平衡27. lead to extravagant waste of public funds 导致公共资金的极度浪费28. make in disorder 使混乱29. be detached from 脱离30. be harmful to our physical and mental and health 损害身心健康31. lead to degradation of social atmosphere 世风日下32. further widen the gaps betw
32、een the rich andthe poor 进一步加大贫富之间的差距33. be the drying up of our limited natural resources and the deterioration of the environment 有限的自然资源的枯竭和环境的恶化34. contaminate environment 污染环境35. generate electromagnetic radiation and jeopardize human health 产生电磁污染而且危害人类健康36. bring about the risks such as compu
33、ter virus,nuclear leakage, biological weapons, global warming, exhaustion of natural resources and extinction of many plant and animal species 带来很多风险，比如电脑病毒，核泄露，生化武器，全球变暖，自然资源的枯竭以及很多动植物物种的灭绝37. be a root of all evils 万恶之源38. be easily taken in by 容易被欺骗39. aggravate the traffic jams and worsen the crowdedness 使交通堵塞和拥挤更为恶化40. will pay a high price for this negative development of 为的负面发展付出高昂的代价。雅思写作5.5 都是因为假大空
