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1、Writing,Leaving school（毕业时分）Growing pains and gains（成长的烦恼与欢乐）I have a dream（我有一个梦想）Things I hate to do（我不喜欢。）Love around me（我身边的爱)I want to do something for my school(我为学校做件事）Im proud of myself（我为自己感到自豪）,与生活相关与“我”相关,Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me happy.(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为
2、题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)The following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,What should
3、we write about?What shouldnt we(only)write about?,Free talk,1.My school life,2.My dream teacher,3.The thing I hate to do,4.My opinions of keeping pet dogs,5.The best way to make me happy,内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me
4、happy.,The following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),The best way to make me happy is achieving good marks.I think this way is the
5、best one to make me happy because it is the easiest ways and it can improve my ability so I think it is the best way.In this way,I can get some prizes,so I will feel happy,whats more it can also make my parents happy.,The following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make
6、you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),内容不全,there are a lot of ways to make me happy.The best way to make me happy is to play basketball.To play computer games is also a way to make me happy.Everyday we hav
7、e PE lesson.These are a lot of interests in it.So I feel happy in this way.,The following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),内容不全,the
8、best way to make me happy is to help another.When I feel sad,I can help another,because I hope the others happy.I can help old people cross the road and play with small children.In this way I feel another happy,then I also will happy.Help others not only make me happy,but also make others happy.,The
9、 following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),内容不全,The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,What do you think of thi
10、s article?,内容不全,1.What was the thing you did in the winter holidays?(1)2.Give some descriptions about it,such as where/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did?(2),The winter holidays are one of the most exciting holidays in the year.The most unforgettable thin
11、g I did in the winter holidays is making a birthday cake with my mother on my birthday.My mother bought the things we needed from the supermarket.We mixed the flour and eggs,then added some special things to make the cake soft.Finally,we put it into the oven.I shared the cake with my family members.
12、It was really delicious.I will never forget that day.,内容得分5,My spoken English used to be very poor.I tried to improve it,but failed.So I told it to my English teacher and wished him to give me some advice.He told me that I could improve my spoken English by speaking more English.He said,The more you
13、 practice speaking English,the more progress you will make.Then I followed his advice and spoke as much English as possible.At last,my spoken English improved.,My trouble,What is missed in this article?,What was your trouble in your study?(2)How did you face the trouble?(3)How did you feel after sol
14、ving it?(2),内容得分5,The environment is important to us all.We need fresh air,clean water and so on.There used to be many trees around us,the air was fresh and the river was clean,but now they disappeared for one reason or another and were replaced by dirty water and polluted air.Because of the terribl
15、e pollution,peoples health is getting worse and worse.Whats more,the green house effect is changing our climate,which may lead to even more serious situation.,Environment around us,What is missed in this article?,1.What do you think of the environment around us?（4）2.As students,what should we do?（3）
16、,内容得分4,The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,What do you think of this article?,内容不全,1.What was the thing you did in the winter holidays?(1)2.Give some descriptions about it,such as where/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did?(2),The win
17、ter holidays are one of the most exciting holidays in the year.The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays is making a birthday cake with my mother on my birthday.My mother bought the things we needed from the supermarket.We mixed the flour and eggs,then added some special things to ma
18、ke the cake soft.Finally,we put it into the oven.I shared the cake with my family members.It was really delicious.I will never forget that day.,内容得分5,My spoken English used to be very poor.I tried to improve it,but failed.So I told it to my English teacher and wished him to give me some advice.He to
19、ld me that I could improve my spoken English by speaking more English.He said,The more you practice speaking English,the more progress you will make.Then I followed his advice and spoke as much English as possible.At last,my spoken English improved.,My trouble,What is missed in this article?,What wa
20、s your trouble in your study?(2)How did you face the trouble?(3)How did you feel after solving it?(2),内容得分5,The environment is important to us all.We need fresh air,clean water and so on.There used to be many trees around us,the air was fresh and the river was clean,but now they disappeared for one
21、reason or another and were replaced by dirty water and polluted air.Because of the terrible pollution,peoples health is getting worse and worse.Whats more,the green house effect is changing our climate,which may lead to even more serious situation.,Environment around us,What is missed in this articl
22、e?,1.What do you think of the environment around us?（4）2.As students,what should we do?（3）,内容得分4,Nowadays,our environment is becoming worse and worse.Our bad habits cause many problems like air pollution,land pollution and water pollution.To make our environment better,I want to be an environment pr
23、otector.We can plant trees to make the air clean because trees can take in CO2 and release O2 into the air.We should buy and use environmentally friendly goods.Finally,we mustnt leave a lot of rubbish into the river,pond or sea.So lets be environment protectors and enjoy living a better life on the
24、earth.,I want to be an environment protector,内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,*重点写什么,(提示问题）,Nowadays,there are many problems of our environment such as air pollution,water pollution and land pollution.People cut down and burn the forest.People use things once and throw them away.Peop
25、le use chemicals to produce many things.Because of these reasons,our earth is in great danger.We live on the earth,its our duty to protect it.I will do a lot of things so that I can protect the earth.,For example,I will reuse the plastic bags.There are a lot of ways to be green consumers.,I want to
26、be an environment protector,Use the following points as a guide.(下列要点仅供参考）What are the problems of our environment?Why do you want to be an environment protector?What will you do to protect the environment?,Everybody has many ways to make happy.So do I.First,I listen some favorite music.Second,I rea
27、d some books and make some notes.I think it is good.Third,I play basketball with my friends.In my opinion,play basketball is the best way to make me happy,because I fond of it.Because of those,I become happy and strong.,1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one t
28、o make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in this way?(give at least two reasons),内容（7分）,+语言（8分）+文采（3分）,一、认真审题，结构合理,*写什么,(题目，参考问题）,*重点写什么,(提示问题）,*时态,(参考问题）,”I want to be an environment protector(保护者)”,Use the following points as a guide.(下列要点仅供参考）What are the problems of our environment?Why do you wa
29、nt to be an environment protector?What will you do to protect the environment?,My trouble,What was your trouble in your study?(2)How did you face the trouble?(3)How did you feel after solving it?(2),The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,1.What was the thing you did in the winter
30、 holidays?(1)2.Give some descriptions about it,such as where/when/how/who,etc.(4)3.Why do you think its the most unforgettable thing you did?(2),Environment around us,1.What do you think of the environment around us?（4）2.As students,what should we do?（3）,二、理清思路，列出提纲,Write a passage of at least 60 wo
31、rds on the topic”I want to be an environment protector(保护者)”(以”I want to be an environment protector”为题写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格。),Use the following points as a guide.(下列要点仅供参考）1.What are the problems of our environment?2.Why do you want to be an environment protector?3.What will you do to protect the e
32、nvironment?,Write at least 60 words about the topic The best way to make me happy.(以“最能使我快乐的方法”为题，写一篇不少于60个词的短文，标点符号不占格)The following points are for your reference:(所给提示仅供参考)1.What are the ways to make you happy?2.Which way do you think is the best one to make you happy?3.Why do you feel happy in th
33、is way?(give at least two reasons),三、连词成句，初步成形,四、检查修改，内容无误,Environment is very important for us.In our life,the problems of our environment are very important.We have hurt it too much by cutting down trees and pollute water and land.I want to be a environment protector so that save it.Id suggest my
34、parents to take bus instead of drive car.I will progress my habbits such as use a basket or a paper bag.I will prevent people throw rubbish everywhere.If everybody can do somethings to protect the earth,our environment will be much beautiful.,I want to be an environment protector,The winter holidays
35、 are one of the most exciting days in the year.I did a lot of things this winter holidays.the most unforgetable thing is to make my birthday cake with my mother on my birthday.My mother buy the things we need from the supermarket.We mixed the floor and eggs.Then add some special things to make the c
36、ake soft.Finally,we put it into the iron.I shared the cake with my family numbers.It was really delicions.I will never forget that day because I learned to make cakes as well as share my happiness with others.,The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,What do you think of this artic
37、le?,错误太多,10,Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.,1.I climed slowly and was very tried.,2.I think it is an unforgetable thing because I helped sb.,climbed,tired,unforgettable,somebody,3.On a friday afternoon,I went shopping with my mother.,Spelling（拼写）,（others),Friday,4.
38、I cant forget that day.Because it is the last time we can celebrate her birthday together.,I cant forget that day because,5.What a crazy day it was,I will remember it forever.,!,Capital letter（大小写）,Punctuation（标点符号）,6.I will remembered that day forever.,remember,7.I thought it is hungry.,was,8.My gr
39、andmother always tidy up my room.,tidies,9.How unforgettable this things is!,thing,Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.,Tense（时态）,Verb agreement(主谓一致),Word form(词形）,10.In my fathers help,I became more patient than before.,With my fathers help,11.To cut a long story to s
40、hort,.,To cut a long story short,12.I went to Shihua by a bus with my mother.,by bus,13.My mother told me dont give it up.,told me not to give it up,Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.,Phrases(短语和固定搭配）,14.I saw an old lady lay in the middle of the road.,saw an old lady
41、 lying,16.We played snow in front of house.,played with,15.I sat on a seat,listening music.,listening to,17.Then a lady asked who had broken her window.We all were afraid.,were all,Find out the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.,Missing words（漏词）,18.We should do things by our own
42、hands.,with,the house,19.It is tired work.,tiring,Words order（词序）,Using wrong word（选词错误）,22.He encouraged me to look for the watch by heart.,carefully,21.One Sunday morning,I went to Shihua by bus and sat beside me was a girl.,I went to Shihua on a bus and there was a girl sitting beside me.,Find ou
43、t the mistakes in the following sentences and correct them.,Chinese English（中式英语）,In my life,many things happened.,20.In my life have many things happened.,1.Environment is very important for us.,2.In our life,the problems of our environment are very important.,3.We have hurt it too much by cutting
44、down trees and pollute water and land.,4.I want to be a environment protector so that save it.,5.Id suggest my parents to take bus instead of drive car.,7.I will progress my habbits such as use a basket or a paper bag.,8.If everybody can do somethings to protect the earth,our environment will be muc
45、h beautiful.,6.I will prevent people throw rubbish everywhere.,to,polluting,in order to save it/so that I can save it,take a bus instead of driving a car,from throwing,develop good habits,using,something,much more beautiful,serious,an environment,1,2,3,4.2,5,6,7.1,8.1,4.1,7.2,8.2,1.是否有大小写错误(capital
46、letters or lowercase letters)是否有拼写错误(spelling mistakes)是否有标点错误(punctuation mistakes)4.是否有语法错误(grammar mistakes)主谓是否一致 动词的时态 语态的使用是否正确 词组的搭配是否合乎习惯,Common Errors in English writing,During the winter holidays,It happened a lot of things.One of the things was helpt a small girl to find her mother.When m
47、y friends and me shopping in a shopping mall,we saw a small girl cried in a corner.We asked what happened on her.She said she cuondt found her mother.So we started to helpt she to found her mother.Luckily,we found her mother,they were very happy and we were happy,too.I think it was the most unforget
48、table thing I did in the winter holidays because I found I also can help others.,The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,Check and correct this article.,a lot of things happened.,helping,I,were shopping,crying,happened to,couldnt,find,help,her,find,.,They,could also,so,During the
49、winter holidays,It happened a lot of things.One of the things was helpt a small girl to find her mother.When my friends and me shopping in a shopping mall,we saw a small girl cried in a corner.We asked what happened on her.She said she cuondt found her mother.So we started to helpt she to found her
50、mother.Luckily,we found her mother,they were very happy and we were happy,too.I think it was the most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays because I found I also can help others.,The most unforgettable thing I did in the winter holidays.,a lot of things happened.,helping,I,were shopping,
