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9、,丰富对说明对象的介绍。(3)议论性文章。扩写时要忠于原文的观点,在 此基础上进一步补充论据,阐释观点。,技法点拨,文题展示,一、学习完本单元的诗歌,一名同学总结了自己对 诗歌的认识,写了下面这句话。回顾读过的诗 歌,从中选择几首作为例子,将这句话扩写一 段话。不少于300字。,诗歌是一种很特别的文学体裁,有三个突出特点:一是用意象来表达情感,二是语言凝练,三是讲究节奏和韵律。,扩句成段时要先为三个突出特点举例,针对三个特点,各举一两个恰当的例子,然后围绕对应的特点,对每个例子作具体的分析。,写作要求,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才

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16、裁的解释;引用名言,增添文章的底蕴,彰显文化气息。,写作例文,一是用意象来表达情感。这一点舒婷的祖国啊,我亲爱的祖国一诗就表现得相当突出。诗中作者选取“破旧的老水车”“熏黑的矿灯”“干瘪的稻穗”“失修的路基”“淤滩上的驳船”等意象,来象征祖国落后的经济、落后的文化和多年蒙受的苦难,同时也展现了在灾难中艰难挣扎、缓慢前行的祖国的形象。正是通过这些意象,诗人抒发了与,祖国血肉相连、荣辱与共的感情,表达了强烈的爱国之情和历史责任感。因此,阅读诗歌,抓住意象,往往就能找到打开诗歌情感大门的钥匙。二是语言凝练。诗歌是最凝练的语言,特别是古代的诗歌,是很讲究字词的锤炼的,这一方面贾岛的“推敲”就,增加事例

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20、对诗的行数、诗句的字数(或音节)、声调音韵、词语对仗、句式排列等均有严格规定。现代诗虽然不受格律限制,无固定格式,注重自然的、内在的节奏,但仍讲究节奏和押韵。如鲁藜的泥土,虽然仅有两节四句,但前后两节都押“u”,韵,这样读来就比较流畅,富有韵致和美感。,补充格律诗的节奏、韵律,现代诗以鲁藜的泥土为例,说明诗歌讲究节奏和押韵。,习作抓住扩写的要求,围绕对应点,分别举例加以印证,使原有句子内容更加丰富充实,说明也更加清楚明白。为让表达更加形象,小作者还善于运用对比手法、引用名人名言等,增强了作品的可读性,增添文采。,名师点评,“重耳拜土”扩写,暮色快要降临了,西边的夕阳红的鲜艳,鸟儿成群结队地归巢

21、了。这时五鹿城外的荒野上行驶着一队人马,他们就是被迫逃亡的晋国公子重耳和随从们。重耳坐在马车上,被马,文题二,写作例文,增加环境描写,渲染气氛,突出背景。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,

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24、了。”重耳眯起眼睛看着太阳,脑中憧憬出自己身披王袍,身坐高,位的景象。许久,他回过神来说:“但愿天助我也,只是这夕阳荒野如此悲凉,我心中很不舒服呀!”众人都不言语了。又行了一会儿,重耳说:“今天一天都没吃东西了,我饿得很。”,增加人物的细节描写,突出人物形象。,狐偃说:“我们也都饿了,前面有个树林,也许会有人住,咱们去讨些吃的。”那里果然有人居住,重耳一行来到一块田地边。这里土地贫瘠,麦苗稀疏,一位老农正在田间除草。,增加想象情节,丰富文章内容。,重耳走上前说:“我是晋国的公子,逃亡到此,腹中实在饥饿,望老者施舍一些吃的。”老农直起腰来,抹抹头上的汗珠,上下打量着重耳。他环顾了一下自己荒芜的田

25、地,心中想:我也已经一天没吃饭了,哪有吃的给你们?苦笑了一下,老农蹲下身去拿了一块土疙瘩递给重耳。重耳大怒,骂道:“你竟敢戏弄我!”说着扬起鞭子就要抽他。狐偃,赶紧拉住重耳说:“公子不可,这是上天赐给的宝物呀!土块是国家的象征,是建立国家的预兆。”重耳一听大喜,立即叩头谢了老农,郑重地接过土块,包好放在车上。,增加人物对话,丰富文章的内容。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元

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28、结构,前后的写景衬托了人物的心理变化,中间增加重耳的艰难,结尾水到渠成;三是语言生动,增添的环境描写起到了渲染作用,对话更是丰富了人物形象,增添了作品的生动性。,名师点评,持之以恒方能成功,“苟有恒,何必三更眠五更起;最无益,莫过一日曝十日寒。”这是明代大学问家胡居仁撰写的对联,意在勉励自己:做事情贵在持之以恒。持之以恒,就要注重平日积累,而非临时抱佛脚。持之,文题三,写作例文,以恒,就要注意坚持,而非一曝十寒。古今中外很多事例都告诉我们,做事情有恒心方能成功。伟大的发明家爱迪生能成为“发明大王”,就是他坚持不懈、持之以恒工作的结果。如果他像平常人一样总是半途而废,电气时代也就不会到来的如此,

29、抓住材料的观点作为扩写的中心论点。,早。他那千千万万个发明都经历了无数次的失败才成功,是坚持成就了他的事业。坚持下去,“脚会战胜路”。走出迷茫的信念,支撑和引导着求生的人寻找方向。拥有坚定的信念和毅力并持之以恒,相信世界上就没有走不,扩写论据。以爱迪生最终成就为例,论证观点。,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路,状元成才路

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32、来皆是血,十年辛苦不寻常”的红楼梦。天赋过人的人如果没有毅力和恒心做基础,他的才华也只会像火花一样转瞬即逝。唐玄宗李,扩写论据。增加曹雪芹“披阅十载,增删五次”,成就“字字看来皆是血,十年辛苦不寻常”的红楼梦的事例,说明持之以恒的重要性。,隆基,从他父亲那里接班,可谓基础雄厚,再加上他年轻志长,意气风发,有了“开元盛世”的局面。然而晚年的他沉迷酒色,没有了“立业”的志向,“安史之乱”随之而来,唐朝也从此由盛转衰,一个国家就这样走了下坡路。,扩写反而论据。与前文形成对比。,生活不易,成功就好比一首歌,如果没有“持之以恒”的主旋律,这首跃动的歌曲如何在人生的每一个驿站留下欢乐的音符?同样,我们在求

33、学、成长的路途上也应持之以恒,只有这样,我们才能有勇气走到最后,也只有这样,我们才能走向成功。,由生活到自己的学习,紧扣扩写的材料,水到渠成。,这篇习作抓住“持之以恒方能走向成功”这一观点,从事实和道理两个方面补充论据。扩写后,材料详实,内容具体,观点更有说服力。在写法上,作者采用正反对比的手法,两正一反,从不同的侧面说明“持之以恒”的重要性,论述精辟,结构清晰,是一篇不错的扩写文。,名师点评,(2018海南)阅读下面材料,发挥想象,按要求将语段扩写成一篇记叙文。,中考真题,听说省博物馆展出了一艘从海底打捞出来的古沉船,我和妈妈前往参观。一进展厅,这艘传说中的古沉船就映入我的眼帘。我驻足凝望,

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