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1、周末考试英语书面表达常见问题评析,一、试题特点,试题要求假设你正在参加全省中学生英语演讲比赛，请你针对有些父母经常翻看孩子日记或书包这一现象，写一篇演讲稿，陈述你的观点。演讲稿的主要内容应包括：1、认为同学们不必为此苦恼；2、希望能够体谅父母的苦衷；3、建议与父母进行交流和沟通。注意：1.词数100左右；2.可以适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；3.开头和结尾已为你写好，不计入总词数。Good morning,ladies and gentleman.Some of us are having problems with our parents,as they often look into our
2、 school bags or read our diaries.,命题特点,本文属于提纲类作文，体裁为应用文中的演讲稿，题种材的现实性强，考生的话语较多，此类作文，难度不大，考生应注意基本语言和句式的运用，以及上下文的过渡。本题的控制程度较高，三个观点已经用汉语给出，考生只需将其翻译或形成比较好的适合书面形态的英语即可。有几个问题值得同学们探讨。在这样的控制下，如何使语言表达更加贴切？如何用较高级语汇来表达？如何过渡？如何画龙点睛？如何使文气贯通等等？,二、篇章结构基本模式,第一段，认为同学们不必为此苦恼；篇幅的 比重相对较小；第二段，希望能够体谅父母的苦衷并做适当个人发挥个人建议，篇幅可稍
3、大些；第三段，结论部分，简明扼要为好。,三、评分依据和原则,首先根据 文章内容、语言、逻辑、字数等确定所属档次；然后根据该档次的要求进行衡量和比较；最后在该档次的5分内给出相对准确的分数。漂漂亮亮(21-25)、清清楚楚(16-20)、马马虎虎(11-15)、不知所云(6-10)、一塌糊涂(1-5)”来概括五个不同档次。,四、存在问题,1)单词用法错误,eg:there is no need to anxious with it.take allowance for she must be anxiety to know.I have an oppitite view.parents choo
4、se to oberserve react negative/handle it positive As a teens,we have to.,2)表达不够地道，中式英文层出不穷,They only worry us who is easy to make mistakes.,Parents is love us.,They hope us to healthy grow.,Eg:I think we have no need to worry about it.,3)谓语、非谓语界限不清,We should make commiciates with our parents.,Eg:our
5、 parents are care about us.,We should response to that in a way,4)主谓不一致,Some students are annoyed with his parents about their actions.,eg:So our parent just want to know more,5)词性混用，特别是形容词与副词之间,After we understand it good,Eg:Although it can improve our communicating able,which can make our communic
6、ation easily.,ability,easy,well,6)词语搭配不当或固定搭配的错误使用,We need time to adapt it.,Eg:The key to understand why they do that lies in.,，so they must pay more attention to deal with it.,understanding,dealing,to,7）.缺少适当的衔接成分，句子之间和文段之间缺乏必要的过渡和连贯，或过渡词和句子使用不当。,五、佳作欣赏,Critics even hold the opinion that our paren
7、ts dont show respect for us by doing this,which often makes for quarrel with them.The key to understanding why they do that lies in the fact that they love us.In anxiety of knowing how we feel,they usually do that without thinking more.We should open our heart to them.It seems that theres no need to
8、 worry about it.It is a form of love,after all.What really deserves our attention is the way we deal with it.Any solution resulting in conflicts shouldnt be adopted.The best way is to have a talk face to face with our parents,or just write a letter.That is to say,try to express your own feelings and
9、 make your voice heard.In a word,finding the approach to getting the message across and keeping peace are important.Thats all,thanks.,此文特点,3注意了句子之间与文段之间的逻辑关系（in a word，after all，That is to say等）,1内容完整，层次分明，论述主次分明，中心 突出，理由充分；,2语言准确性与丰富性兼有：使用了高级词汇（critics、makes for、In anxiety of、approach、conflicts、ado
10、pt等）；同时也有复杂结构和句型的运用（定语从句；主语从句it 作形式宾语；with 结构；定语从句和同位语从句；非谓语动词等）；,六、各档例文,Good morning,ladies and gentlemen.Some of us are having problems with our parents,as they often look into our school bags or read our diaries.I fully understand why we are not comfortable about it,but theres no need to feel too
11、 sad.Our parents are checking our bags or diaries to make sure were not getting into any trouble.They have probably heard some horrible stories about other kids and thought we might do the same.Or perhaps they just want to connect with us but are doing it all wrong.My suggestion is:Tell them we want
12、 them to trust us as much as wed like to trust them.If you dont think you can talk to them,write them a letter and leave it lying aroundthey are bound to read it.Thank you!,（25）,Some of us are having problems with our parents,as they often look into our schoolbags or read our diaries.Every time this
13、 happens,most of us will probably have a fierce argument with them.However,I dont think we should be upset about this.Out of love for us,our parents always try their best to know about us,hoping to step into our heart.We should understand why they do something such as reading our diaries.And dont al
14、ways hide what you think in the shade.Sometimes,communicating a lot with parents can often open a door to a better relationship.Whatever you do,try not to make them worried about you.Anyhow,share your ideas with your parents.Maybe youll find one day,your parents will have lost interest in in your di
15、aries.Thank you!,（20）,As a matter of fact,there is no need to anxious with it,I think.And we should stand on parents side to bring it back in view.Parents do like that only to want to learn more about us so that they can care about our mind as well as bodies better.By this way they can make their wo
16、rds effective to us and communicate with us easily.In my opinion,it will be better to exchange ideas with parents peacefully instead of arguing with them.After all,they are the persons who care us most.,（13）,七、解决策略,1.强化语言基本功训练,1)扩大词汇量,2)过好句型关,完善、美化句子,2)过好句型关,完善、美化句子,五种基本句型的训练,主语+谓语主语+谓语+宾语主语+系动词+表语主
17、语+及物动词+间接宾语+直接宾语主语+谓语+宾语+宾补,2.归纳衔接词或常用句式，选择恰 当连接成分,1)导入,generally speaking,in generalin a way,to some extent,to a certain degreeIn my opinion,As far as I know(am concerned),Personally,I think(suppose,maintain,believe,feel,hold the opinion view)that,2)列举或附加,for example,for instance;such as;namely,tha
18、t is;above all,in the first place,first of all,to begin with,to start with also,besides,furthermore,moreover,in addition,what is more;finally,eventually For one thing,For another;On one hand，on the other hand,3)原因,owing to,on account of,as a result of,because of;thanks to;considering;The reasons why
19、are as follows:There are several reasons why,4)结果,as a result,consequently,therefore,thus,5)强调,indeed;as a matter of fact;in fact,in reality,actually;in other words,after all,naturally,of course,admittedly,6)转折或对照,although;regardless of,in spite of;despite,nevertheless;on the contrary;by contrast,7)
20、时间,after a while,as soon as,meanwhile,recently,lately,so far,for the time being,at present,8)结论,to sum up,to conclude;in conclusion,in a word,in short,in all,in brief,in summary,on the whole,in the long run,9)常用短语或句式,1)It goes without saying that2)There is no denying that3)It is generally believed t
21、hought that It is commonly held that,It is universally acknowledged that，It is generally accepted that4)By contrast,A is blessed with more advantages.By contrast,A enjoys a distinct advantage over B.The advantages outweigh the disadvantages.Opinions vary from individual to individual.Peoples attitud
22、e towards the problem vary from person to person.Opinions are divided on the topic.,Since the Education Department of China _1_(引进了)a new teaching way from Russia,surprisingly,teachers and students found that instead of _2_(减少工作量)，this new teaching way _3_(有增加繁重工作量的趋向tendency).Because_4_(在巨大的压力下pres
23、sure),they found it hard _5_(满足社会的期望)._6_(首先)，although China is more or less _7_(在教育方面与俄罗斯相似)，we should also _8_(考虑到教育的不同国情attach),because they _9_(是紧密相连的link).In China,the population is_10_(分布很散spread)that people find it hard to _11_(实现目标)that all pupils should _12_(上小学).For one reason,in Chinas co
24、untryside,not enough schools exist to _13_(招收)all students,although the government _14_(已作出承诺commitment)to make sure all students can attend school.In fact,they have a tendency _15_(辍学)，for another,_16_(教师的短缺)also _17_(导致)the failure of this teaching method.So,new measures should be taken to _18_ th
25、is trouble.For example,to _19_(欠发达地区)，_20_(可采取远程教育方式).Though it is _21_(艰巨的任务),we can _22_(几乎完全依靠)peoples creativity.After all,only power from our people is the source of the development of society.,3.合理利用习题课素材，以书面表达形式输出 unit 12 education,4.改进作文讲评，提高学生写作兴趣,对于学生共同性的错误，可采取统一讲评的形式；对拼写、结构等低级错误，可采用学生互动原则
26、修改；对于措词不当问题，可采用个别和集中相结合的方法指导学生修改,学生必要的应试技巧。具体操作步骤为：一审（审定人称、主体时态、格式）、二定（确定主题和结构）、三列（列出简明要点）、四连（连词成句，连句成文）、五美（综合运用过渡语的使用、长短句的搭配、倒装、非谓语动词、强调句型、独立主格、复合句的使用、高级词汇等手段进行美化，以达到地道、流畅、一气呵成的效果）、六查（检查大小写、标点、时态、语态、主谓一致）、七抄（将草稿快速、工整地誊写到试卷上形象、生动。,What you should attach importance to is to learn to communicate with
27、your parents.2.In line with the development of society,children should also have an open heart towards it.3.We should live in harmony with our parents.4.It is of equal importance to talk with our friends.5.We should keep in mind that the key to understanding is through communication.6.It is no use a
28、rguing with your parents.There is no point in attaching too much importance to it.,张莹莹,邢俊毅,周修港,于小娟,李经兴,张珊珊,7.How can we find a good way to strike a right balance?8.As a child,we should relate to our parents behavior.9.We ought to bring ourselves back in view.10.In the eyes of our parents11.If we didnt realize it,it would hurt our parents again in the future.12.Lets open our hearts to our parents and make way for communication.13.We must have faith in our parents.,文凌月,王欣欣,谢怡陈莎莎,陈洋洋,李英,李忠,张梦梦,Thank you for your attention!,
