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1、GRE写作2个观点类常见错误实例讲解 GRE写作2个观点类常见错误实例讲解,快来看看吧，下面就和大家分享，来欣赏一下吧。GRE写作2个观点类常见错误实例讲解GRE写作观点类常见错误介绍GRE写作在提炼观点时出问题的情况其实很常见，其中最主要的错误有两种，一种是根据素材提炼出的观点论点过于宽泛，根本没有体现出题目的特色，而只是给出了一个很大很空泛的观点。另外一种则是论点过于狭窄，也就是太过针对题材本身而没有办法引申出更多深层次的思考。这两种错误看似互相矛盾，但对于缺乏GRE作文写作经验的考生来说，无论出现那种错误都需要引起警惕，否则作文成绩将很难有所提升。1. 观点太空太宽在各类教导写作的材料中
2、，大家应该时常会发现关于强调GRE写作论点一定要写得具体，越细越好的指导建议。而考生经常出现的问题就是会出现一些很宽泛的论点句，以至于在较短的篇幅里并不能充分展开，甚至有时候会造成观点重叠。比如去年2月份的GRE考试中有一篇作文，题目要求探讨关于移动电话对于现代人生活的影响。假如考生提炼出的观点是“Mobile phones have changed our life greatly. ”这句只是说手机很大程度上改变了人们的生活，但是并未点明从哪些方面上带来了改变，因此把这个观点具化一下：“Mobile phones can serve as a connection to the Inter
3、net, which can be extremely convenient for obtaining information wherever you may be.”这样一来大家既有具体内容可写，也可以避免观点过于宽泛大而无当的情况。而同样是在去年2月份，还有一篇作文的题目则讨论了关于广告泛滥对于社会舆论造成的干扰。如果考生只是简单写“Advertising has bad effects on all of society. ”广告有不良影响显然是不够的。我们需要写出具体的方面，比如“Advertisements which exaggerate the function of the
4、 products may mislead the consumers.”这样具体的观点才是GRE考官真正希望看到的内容，言之有物也需要从实际出发。2. 观点太细太窄与论点过于宽泛相对的，则是一些考生把论点定得太过狭窄，自己把自己逼近了死胡同以至于没有展开的空间甚至没有进一步支持的必要。这类句子与其说是观点，倒不如说是事实的陈述或者只是举了个例子而已。去年4月GRE作文中曾出现过这样一道题目，讲的是某个地方当地人开展旅游业的看法。有的考生直接把观点写成“There are more local residents engaged in tourism industry. ”这其实并非观点，只是
5、陈述了一个事实就是在当地越来越多人开始从事旅游业，可改为：“Tourism brings huge economic benefits to local residents.”就比较容易展开了。而今年1月份的GRE作文中也有一道讨论不可再生燃料如何持续利用的题目，如果考生写出“The consumption of fossil fuels increase in recent years. ”这样一句看似结论的话既缺乏数据支持也毫无说服力可言，等于是自己把话说死了，后续要怎么展开?正确写法是给出论述重点，假设原因，比如“The consumption of fossil fuels incre
6、asing in recent years results from two factors.”之后就会好写很多。以上两种观点上的错误，无论出现哪一种，对考生来说都将意味着难以取得高分，建议大家与其花更多时间磨炼写作技巧提升写作速度，还不如多看一些题目和范文，在提炼观点上增加一些练习，如此才能更好地避免因为写作观点出错而没能拿到作文高分的情况。GRE范文参考The best way to teach is to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones.Write a response in which you discuss the e
7、xtent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would not be advantageous and explain how these examples shape
8、your position.Score 6 Responsehe recommendation presents a view that I would agree is successful most of the time, but one that I cannot fully support due to the “all or nothing” impression it gives.Certainly as an educator I agree fully that the best way to elicit positive response from students is
9、 to make use of students positive energy and then encourage actions that you would like to see repeated. It is human nature that we all want to be accepted and achieve on some level, and when people in authority provide feedback that we have done something well, the drive to repeat the action that w
10、as praised is bound to be particularly strong.This blanket statement would obviously pay dividends in situations in which a teacher desires to have students repeat particular behaviors. For example, if an educator is attempting to teach students proper classroom etiquette, it would be appropriate to
11、 openly praise a student who raises his or her hand when wishing to speak or address the class. In such cases, the teacher may also help shape positive behaviors by ignoring a student who is trying to interject without approval from the teacher. In fact, the decision to ignore students who are exhib
12、iting inappropriate behaviors of this type could work very well in this situation, as the stakes are not very high and the intended outcome can likely be achieved by such a method. However, it is important to note here that this tactic would only be effective in such a “low-stakes” situation, as whe
13、n a student speaks without raising her hand first. As we will discuss below, ignoring a student who hits another student, or engages in more serious misbehaviors, would not be effective or prudent.To expand on this point, it is important for teachers to be careful when working with the second half o
14、f this statement, only ignoring negative actions that are not serious. Take for instance a student who is misbehaving just by chatting with a fellow classmate. This student might not be presenting much of a problem and may be simply seeking attention. Ignoring the student might, in fact, be the best
15、 solution. Now assume the negative action is the improper administering of chemicals in a science experiment or the bullying of a fellow student. To ignore these negative actions would be absurd and negligent. Now you are allowing a problem to persist, one that could potentially lead to much bigger
16、and more dangerous issues. In a more serious situation, addressing the negative actions quickly and properly could stop the problem it in its tracks. It is for reasons like this that I do not advocate the idea that a teacher can be successful by simply ignoring negative actions.I do, however, greatl
17、y support the idea that the central focus of teaching should be to build on and encourage positive actions. However, the authors all-encompasing statement leaves too many negative possibilities for the classroom. Perhaps a better way to phrase this statement would be to say, “The best way to teach i
18、s to praise positive actions and ignore negative ones that are not debilitating to class efficiency or the safety of any individual”.Thus, in the original statement, there are indeed some good intentions, and there could be a lot of merit in adopting its basic principles. Data proves that positive s
19、upport can substantially increase motivation and desire in students and contribute to positive achievements. In fact, most studies of teaching efficacy indicate that praising positive actions and ignoring negative ones can create a more stable and efficient classroom.It needs to be stressed, however
20、, that this tool is only effective at certain levels of misbehavior. As mentioned above, when the behavior is precipitated by feelings of revenge, power or total self-worthlessness, this methodology will likely not work. It is likely to be very successful, however, when the drive behind the misbehav
21、ior is simple attention seeking. In many of these instances, if the teacher demonstrates clearly that inappropriate behavior does not result in the gaining of attention, students are more likely to seek attention by behaving properly. Should the student choose this path, then the ignoring has worked
22、 and when the positive behavior is exhibited, then the teacher can utilize the first part of the theory and support or praise this behavior.Now it is much more likely to be repeated. If the student does not choose this path and instead elects to raise the actions to a higher level that presents a mo
23、re serious issue, then ignorance alone cannot work and other methods must be employed.In conclusion, one can appreciate the credo expressed in this instance, but surely we all can see the potential error of following it through to the extreme.Reader CommentaryThis response receives a 6 for its well-
24、articulated, insightful analysis of the issue. Rather than simply rejecting or accepting the prompt, the writer argues that the recommendation made by the prompt can often be true but is too “all or nothing“ to be endorsed without qualification. The writer turns this idea into an insightful position
25、 by providing examples and evidence to fully and persuasively support its nuanced argument. The response offers nicely detailed situations that provide compelling support for a claim that the recommendation can, in fact, work. At the same time, it also highlights the recommendations limits using add
26、itional specific, detailed examples. Particularly persuasive is the fourth paragraph, in which the writer compares the impact of ignoring minor behavioral problems like talking in class to the potential costs of ignoring more serious issues like bullying. Thus, the writer recognizes that the prompts
27、 claim, as well as his/her own, is inevitably dependent on the specific context for its success or failure. Throughout the response, the writer demonstrates the ability to convey ideas fluently and precisely, using effective vocabulary and sentence variety. This sentence demonstrates the level of la
28、nguage facility seen throughout the response: ”It is human nature that we all want to be accepted and achieve on some level, and when people in authority provide feedback that we have done something well, the drive to repeat the action that was praised is bound to be particularly strong.”新版GRE写作新题库：
29、Argument题目：The following appeared in a magazine article about planning for retirement.Clearview should be a top choice for anyone seeking a place to retire, because it has spectacular natural beauty and a consistent climate. Another advantage is that housing costs in Clearview have fallen significan
30、tly during the past year, and taxes remain lower than those in neighboring towns. Moreover, Clearviews mayor promises many new programs to improve schools, streets, and public services. And best of all, retirees in Clearview can also expect excellent health care as they grow older, since the number
31、of physicians in the area is far greater than the national average.Write a response in which you discuss what specific evidence is needed to evaluate the argument and explain how the evidence would weaken or strengthen the argument.中文翻译：由于Clearview的天然景色和温和气候，它应该成为那些为退休后寻找生活地的人的首选。另一项好处是，Clearview的房价在去年显著下降，房地产税一直比邻近城市低。而且，Clearview的市长承诺了很多新方案来改学校、街道和公共服务。Clearview的退休人员也可以在老年时享受到出色的医疗服务，因为该地区的医生数量高于全国平均水平。写一篇回应，讨论还需要何种具体的证据才能更好的评估上面的论证，并解释这个证据是如何强化/削弱这篇*的论证的。此上就是为大家提供的新版GRE写作新题库Argument部分的内容，希望大家能够在练习中提高自己的写作水平。GRE写作2个观点类常见错误实例讲解（文库搜索）
