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1、看图作文技巧 高三学生成人礼作文评讲,假设你是红星中学高三学生李华。你校昨天举办了高三学生成人仪式。请按照以下四幅图的先后顺序，以“A Memorable Adulthood Ceremony”为题，给校刊“英语角”写一篇英文稿件，介绍活动全过程。注意：100词左右。提示词：宣誓 take an oath 国旗 national flag 成人门Adulthood Gate注意：,书面表达写作步骤,步骤一：审题立意审文体：审人称：审时态：审要求：,看图类记叙文,第一、三人称,以一般过去时为主,仔细阅读题目，认真观察图片（尤其是图片上的汉字说明），合理补充信息，避免出现偏题、错题或遗漏要点。,第
2、二步认真看图，确立主题,根据四幅图和文字描述,我们可以确立本书面表达的主题是：（昨天）我们学校举行了难忘的成人礼，主题是成长、感激和责任。Yesterday our school held a memorable adulthood ceremony themed“growth,gratitude and responsibility”.Yesterday a memorable adulthood ceremony was held in our school,whose theme was“growth,gratitude and responsibility”.注意:growth,gra
3、titude and responsibility”.词性要一致。,第一幅图：我和一个女孩担任主持人/两个学生担任主 持人第二幅图：家长代表发言。第三幅图：面国对旗宣誓。第四幅图：手拉手，穿过成人门。,第三步围绕主题，提炼要点,第四步合理想象，补出要点,第一幅图：两位主持人发言会表达什么内容呢？对父母和老师的感激 第二幅图：家长代表发言会表达什么内容呢？表达愿望和希望我们的感受呢？感到了父母和老师的关爱,第三幅图：面国对旗宣誓，表达什么呢？表达要做合格的公民，为祖国努力学习的决心。第四幅图：手拉手，穿过成人门，象征什么呢？象征我们都是成年人了。,成年礼之后，自己的感受呢？我了解了更多成年人这个
4、词的含义，对自己、对家人、对社会承担责任。,第五步 确定时态，译出要点,确定表达时所用的正确时态，将围绕主题初选出的要点和经过合理想象补出的要点翻译出来。本篇叙述的是昨天所发生的事，应该用过去时来进行表达。,第一幅图,I was honoured to be the host of the ceremony,together with a girl.In the beginning,on behalf of all the students,we expressed our gratitude to our parents and teachers.A girl and a boy were
5、the host of the ceremony.In the beginning,on behalf of all the students,they expressed our gratitude to our parents and teachers.,Then a parent representative made a speech,expressing the best wishes and expectations to us,which made us feel the love and care from our teachers and parents.,第二幅图,第三幅图
6、,Afterwards,we took an oath facing the national flag,showing our determination to be a qualified citizen and work hard for our country.Afterwards,faced with the national flag we took an oath,showing our determination to be a qualified citizen and work hard for our country.,第四幅图 Finally,hand by hand,
7、we went through a so-called“Adulthood Gate”,which symbolized that we are all grown-up!注意：cross,across,through,区别,第六步连句成篇，过渡自然,对译出的要点通过合理的组合，加上必要的连接词或词语以及照顾到文章的首尾呼应，再加上必要的结束语。我了解了更多成年人这个词的含义，对自己、对家人、对社会承担责任。After the ceremony,I know more about the meaning of the word“adult”,which attaches a responsib
8、ility to myself,to my family and to the society.,Yesterday our school held a memorable adulthood ceremony themed“growth,gratitude and responsibility”.I was honoured to be the host of the ceremony,together with a girl.In the beginning,on behalf of all the students,we expressed our gratitude to our pa
9、rents and teachers.Then a parent representative made a speech,expressing the best wishes and expectations to us,which made us feel the love and care from our teachers and parents.,A Memorable Adulthood Ceremony,Afterwards,we took an oath facing the national flag,showing our determination to be a qua
10、lified citizen and work hard for our country.Finally,hand by hand,we went through a so-called“Adulthood Gate”,which symbolized that we are all grown-up!After the ceremony,I know more about the meaning of the word“adult”,which attaches a responsibility to myself,to my family and to the society.,优点,1、
11、很多同学写得整齐。2、多数同学信息齐全。3、知道用连接词。你们能说出 in the beginning,in the end,at the beginning,at the end 的区别吗？表示先后常用：at first,then,after that/afterwards,ten minutes later,soon,immediately,during,at last,in the end,finally,when,while,after,before。,存在的主要问题,1、没有认真审题，写成了书信格式。2、有少数同学写成了第三人称。3、有少数同学没有分段。4、时态不一致。5、中式英语严重。6、有少数同学书面仍然脏乱差。,衡水中学文科状元 袁嘉玮 147分 高考前书写,理科状元 孟祥熙 146分 高考前书写,
