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1、2022.1月浙江首考学渣与学霸的碰撞WhenDr.GUHiCkSOnwasassigningPrOieCtmatesforhisintroductiontoexperimentalpsychologyclassIsecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.AboveallzIhopedhewouldntassignmetoworkwiththeintensezfiercelycompetitive,singularlySeriOUSfellowwhoalwayswored
2、arkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfatewouldhaveit,Dr.GullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewlabmateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIwerentthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbacka
3、ndprobablycausehisgrade-pointaveragetotakeanosedive.Hewasntoutrightmeanorabusive.Hejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Needlesstosay,IdidntlookforwardtoanentiretermofbeingbrushedofbutItriedtomakethebestofitanddidntsayanything,lestImakethingsworse.Theproject
4、requiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesis,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,runthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmyteammateandImettodiscussourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-m
5、indednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.Iwasoutmatched.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidntwanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.A代erlengthydiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthetactile-kinestheticperceptionofspace.Iwasntsurewhatitmeant,butatleastwehada
6、topic.Paragraph1Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.Paragraph2OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.language (语言包括动作、语言、心 理、情绪、环境描写特点)Setting(场景包括时间、地点)第一步：SPIJT+3C法分析阿波Setting：atschool,everydaylifePlot(character)：当GIlniCkSoIl博士分配项目伙伴上实验心理学课时，我希望和最好的朋友分在一组，至少和自己的一个玩得来的同学一组
7、，但偏偏被命运捉弄，博士把我和一个高冷的学霸分在一组，他根本不把我这个学渣放在眼里，摆着一种他独自就能搞定的架势。我也不甘被看扁，不想给高冷搭档满足感，于是我硬着头皮开启了极具挑战性的空间触觉-动觉联想的实验，我不明所以，但总算有了个主题。我们开始定期碰头制定计划.突然一天我得知他因为重病住院了.Theme(clue+conflict)Conflict：Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgrades一theexactoppositeofme.Iwasoutmatched.我最不想和学
8、霸分在一组VS学霸不把我放在眼里Clue：突然一天我得知他因为重病住院了学霸有软弱的时候，学渣也有不可忽视的潜力突出的主题是：学会与人合作，学霸与学渣的和解，彼此接纳1.anguage动作描写Theprojectrequiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesiszsetupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,runthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.（动作链）心理描写Isecretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithmybestfriendoratlea
9、staclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.HelookedatmeasthoughIwerentthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgrade-pointaveragetotakeanosedive.（虚拟语气表达作者的不满）情绪描写AboveallzIhopedhewouldntassignmetoworkwiththeintense,fiercelycompetitive,singularlySeriOUSfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesan
10、dapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.（多个形容词，副词修饰，表达讨厌之情绪）Imitate1动作链：Withoutanydelay,Ipackedupmyschoolbag,tookalltheexperimentstatisticsandrushedtothehospital.2心理描写Developingthehypothesis,settingupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,andrunningthetestswereallhistasksalone,leavingmejuststandingbesidehimasifI
11、wereafool.（虚拟语气表达作者的不满）3情绪描写Itturnedouttobesuchanexcellent,fast,amazingandpersuasivestudythatmyteammateandl_didwinthebestHrade.（多个形容词修饰，表达傲娇之情绪）可以引用的词句developahypothesis,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesiszrunthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.theintense,fiercelycompetitive,sing
12、ularlySerioUSfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.第二步续写情节构思Paragraph1Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.情境1虽说我们定期见面，但几乎所有的决定都是他一个人拍板情境2很快，我们就完成了假设，设定实验计划，和测试，我计划是一个旁观者，插不上手情境3但我渐渐明白这个主题了，眼看着就要进入最后分析数据阶段了Paragraph2OnedayIgotwordsthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriou
13、sdisease.情境1我急忙赶去医院探望他情境2看他穿着洁白的病号服，再也不是那永远的冷酷黑色，我感叹学霸也脆弱情境3在他的指导下，我完成了数据统计和结果展示，我们得了最高分。我和学霸成为最佳拍档第三步遣词造句修改润色下水作文Paragraph1Westartedtomeetregularlytodrawupourplans.CompanionasIwasintheproject,Istillhadnosenseofparticipatingintheproject.Myteanmatekepthisbrainoccupiedindevelopingthehypothesis,setting
14、upanexperimenttotestit,andrunningthetestsalone,leavingmejuststandingbesidehimasifIwereafool.Whatadullprojectitis!”Imurmuredtomyself.However,somethingchangedgradually,asIbecameawarewhatthetactile-kinestheticperceptionofspacemeant.Thankstotheintense,fiercelycompetitive,singularlySerioUSfellow,thewhole
15、procedurewentsmoothly,closetothefinalstage.Paragraph2OnedayIgotwordthathewasadmittedtohospitalforaseriousdisease.Withoutanydelay,Ipackedupmyschoolbag,tookalltheexperimentstatisticsandrushedtothehospital.Seeingthepalefellowwearingpurewhiteclothesinsteadoftheannoyingdarkclothes,Ifeltasenseofsympathyan
16、dmercywellingupinmyheart.Withhisguidance,Ifinishedthestatisticalanalysisandpresentedthefindings.ItturnedouttobesuchanamazingandpersuasivestudythatmyteammateandIdidwinthebestgrade.Now,wehavebeennecessarypartnersfor10yearssincethatyear.2022年1月浙江高考续写原文AnUnlikelyHeroTongLuWhenDr.Gullicksonwasassigningpr
17、ojectmatesforhisintroductiontoexperimentalpsychologyclass,1secretlyhopedhewouldpairmewithacutecoedoratleastaclassmateIcouldhavesomefunwith.Aboveall,Ihopedhewouldntassignmetoworkwiththeintense,fiercelycompetitive,singularlyseriousfellowwhoalwaysworedarkclothesandapparentlyhadapersonalitytomatch.Asfat
18、ewouldhaveit,Dr.GullicksonverydeliberatelymatchedeveryoneinclassandannouncedthatIwouldbeworkingwiththeonepersoninclassIwantedtoavoid.Iwentuptomynewlabmateandintroducedmyself.HelookedatmeasthoughIwerentthere.IfelthetreatedmeasthoughIwouldholdhimbackandprobablycausehisgradepointaveragetotakeanosedive1
19、.Hewasn,toutrightmeanorabusive2.Hejustgavemetheimpressionhecoulddowhateverprojectwedreamedupbetterifhediditalone.Hewasaloner,andIcouldonlyimpede3hisresearch.Hehadimportantthingstodo,andIwasgoingtobesomethingofanannoyancehe,dhavetodealwith.Needlesstosay,Ididntlookforwardtoanentiresemesterofbeingbrush
20、edoffbutItriedtomakethebestofitanddidntsayanything,lestImakethingsworse.Theprojectrequiredeachlabteamtodevelopahypothesis,setupanexperimenttotestthehypothesis,runthetests,dothestatisticalanalysisandpresentthefindings.Whatevergradetheteamreceivedwouldbesharedbybothstudents.WhenmylabmateandImettodiscu
21、ssourproject,Iwasuneasy.Herewasthischallengingstudentwhohadareputationforsingle-mindednessandgoodgradestheexactoppositeofme.Iwasoutmatched.Iactuallywantedtodroptheclassatonepoint,butstoppedshortbecauseIdidn,twanttogivehimthesatisfactionofmychickeningout.Iaskedmyfriendsatworkwhat1shoulddo,andtheovera
22、llresponsewastostickitoutnomatterwhat.Afterlengthydiscussions,wesomehowagreedtodoastudyonthetactile-kinestheticperceptionofspace.Iwasn,tsurewhatitmeant,butatleastwehadatopic.Westartedtomeetregularlytoformulate4ourplans,andeverytimeIfelttheprojectwasmorehisthanmine.ThemoreWemet,themore1resentedhisint
23、elligenceandhisabilitytocutthroughtothecoreissues.AndIwasawarehewasmuchmoreadvancedthanI.Heknewtechnicalthingsandapproachedeverydetailwithgreatsingularityofpurpose.I,ontheotherhand,musthaveseemednaive,withlittletooffer.AtonepointIsummonedupmycourageandaskedhimwhyheseemedsouptightandserious.Tomysurpr
24、ise,herepliedthathedidn,thavetimeforsmalltalkorpettypeopleandthingsthatwouldwastehistime.Heevenwentontosaythathedidn,thaveanyfriendsbecausemostso-calledfriendswerejustadistraction.But,headded,whenhedidchoosesomeonetobehisfriend,theywouldbeafriendforlife.Iwasflooredbyhiscoldandcynicalresponse.Rightth
25、enandthere,Irealizedtheendofthesemestercouldn,tcomesoonenough.Asthesemesterworeon,wetriedtofashionasimpleyetelegantexperiment.Partofourjobwasto4Studentswhohadvolunteeredtobesubjectsforourproject.Idecidedtodevote5myselftothetaskofworkingwiththesubjects,whilehedevelopedthescientificmodel.Iputinmytwoce
26、nts,worthwheneverIcould,butIstillfelthewasthedrivingforce.ThenonedayIgotwordthathewasinthehospital.Apparently,hehadbeenadmittedforahemorrhagingulcer.Thestressofgettingthebestgrades,holdingdownajobandhelpinghisgirlfriendthroughthemedicalcrisisshewasgoingthroughhadtakenitstollonhim.WhenIvisitedhiminth
27、ehospital,Inoticedforthefirsttimeasenseofvulnerabilityonthefaceofmystoiclabmate.IknewthathewasawarethatIcouldblowtheexperiment,andoursharedgradewouldshatterhisloftyG.P.A.andpossiblyderailhischancesforgraduateschool.IassuredhimIwouldnotlethimdownandheshouldonlyconcentrateongettingbetter.Iwoulddomybes
28、t.Webothknewdhavetodobetterthanmybest.Ihadaformidabletaskaheadofme.Iwasinovermyhead,runningthestatisticaldata.IpouredmoretimeandenergyintothatprojectthanIhadeverdoneonanyassignmentinmylife.Iwasnotgoingtolethimseemefailandhaveitreflectonhim.Iwasworkingthegraveyardshiftatmyjob,soIusedwhateverquiettime
29、frommidnightto6A.M.toworkontheproject.Theworkconsumedme.Therewasasenseofchallengethatcompletelyovertookme.Thequestionremained:WasIuptoit?Eventually,thesemestercametoaclose,andeachteamhadtopresentitsfindingsinfrontoftheassembledclass.Whenitwasourturn,Ididmylevelbesttopresenthisscientificmethodologywi
30、thmyshowmanship6.Tomyamazement,wewereawardedanA!WhenItoldmylabmateaboutoursharedtriumph,hesmiledandthankedmeforcarryingon.Somethingconnectedthen.Somethingspecial.Ithadtodowithtrustandtheexhilarationofsharingacommonprize.Wehavestayedclosethroughouttheyears.Hewentontoachieveadoctorate.Healsowentontoma
31、rryhiscollegegirlfriend.Ilearnedmorethanstatisticalanalysisandexperimentalproceduresthatsemester.Mylifehasbeenenhancedbyourencounterandchallengedbythisman,whobecamemyunlikelyhero.Andintheend,hewasright:wehavebecomefriendsforlife.另类英雄托尼卢纳当古尔利克森博士正在为实验心理学课安排研究小组时，我默默地祈祷他能够把我与一个可爱的女生，至少是一个志趣相投的同学分在一组。总
32、而言之，我希望他不要让我与一个具有强烈竞争意识、异常严肃的家伙做搭档，这种人个性十足，并且总爱穿着深颜色的衣服。经过一番深思熟虑之后，古尔利克森博士公布了分组决定，宣布我与一个我最想躲避的人成为一组，这就像命中注定似的。我走到自己的实验搭档面前，作了自我介绍。他看着我的样子，仿佛我并不存在似的。我感觉到，他似乎认为我会阻碍他进步，并且很可能导致他的平均成绩直线下降。他并不完全怀有恶意,只是给了我这样的印象，无论什么实验，如果他独自去做就会做得更好。我的加入似乎只会妨碍他的研究，只能成为他不得不花时间和精力应付的麻烦，因为他是一个能够独立完成任务的人，他有重要的事情要做。当然，我不想把整个学期都
33、荒废掉，为了不让事情变得更加糟糕，我什么也没说，只是尽力把实验做好。根据计划，每个实验小组要提出假设、作实验检验假设、作统计学分析、介绍研究结果。小组所取得的成绩就是每个小组成员的成绩。我每次都忐忑不安地与同伴讨论实验的问题，他的专注和优秀的成绩是出了名的，他是一个勇于挑战的人。正相反，我与他相差甚远，事实上，我心里曾经闪现过逃课的念头，然而，我不想被他看扁，所以很快放弃了这种想法。我向那些忙于工作的朋友请教我该如何去做，他们的答复全部是，无论发生什么，你都要坚持到最后。经过长时间讨论之后，我们终于达成一致，决定做一项关于空间触觉和动觉感知的研究。我们已经确定了题目，虽然我并不明白这是一项什么
34、研究。为了制定计划，我们定期碰面，每次讨论决定之后，我都觉得是他制定了计划。我们碰面的次数越多，我对他的才智和直击问题核心的能力就越憎恨。我逐渐意识到，他的水平比我高很多。他很了解技术方面的知识，并且能够带着非常明确的目标去处理细节问题。另一方面，我能提出的建议微乎其微，看起来似乎很幼稚。有一次，我鼓起勇气问他，他为什么那么紧张严肃。他回答我说，他没有闲聊的时间，对他来说，无聊的人和事情只是浪费时间，这令我感到惊讶。他甚至告诉我，那些所谓的朋友只会令人分心，因此，他没有结交很多朋友。不过，他补充说，旦选择某人作为自己的朋友，他就会把他们当作一生的朋友。他的冷淡和愤世嫉俗，令我感到非常震惊。当时
35、，我恨不得这个学期马上结束。时光荏苒，我们尝试设计了一个非常出色的实验，而且实验操作也很简单。挑选志愿做实验对象的学生成为了我们工作的一部分，我决定致力于招募研究对象，他负责阐述科学方法。我抓住一切可能的机会陈述自己的意见，然而，我仍然有一种感觉：他才是整个实验的推动力量。有一天，我得知他生病住进了医院。很显然，他是因为溃疡出血才住进医院的。他想取得最好的成绩，想找一份工作，想帮助生病的女朋友度过危险期，他背负的这些压力把他压垮了。当去医院看望这个坚忍克己的实验伙伴时，我第一次发现，他脸上有了一种脆弱的表情。我知道，他是担心我会把实验搞砸，担心他非常高的总平均成绩会被小组实验成绩给毁掉，甚至会
36、突然失掉进研究院的机会。我告诉他应该一心一意恢复健康,并保证我一定会付出最大的努力，不会让他失望的。我们都很清楚，我必须比最好做得还要好。任务非常艰巨，我埋头整理统计资料，这些资料已经超出了我的理解范围。我有生以来所做的任何作业，都不曾付出这么多的时间和精力。我不能让他看到我失败，不愿意因为我而影响他的成绩。为了能够利用一切安静的时间进行研究,我把工作时间调整到夜里，从午夜一直干到凌晨六点。我被工作吸引住了，感觉自己全身心地投入到了一场挑战之中。仍然还有问题，我能解决吗？在本学期即将结束的时候，各个小组终于要在所有组合小组前陈述自己的研究成果了。轮到我们组的时候，我使用自己的表演技巧阐述了他的科学方法，我竭尽了全力。我们得了“A”，这令我感到异常惊喜！当我告诉实验伙伴，我们共同的努力取得了成功时，他笑着感谢我完成了实验。那一刻,某些东西将我们联系在了一起。这些特别的东西,与信赖有关,与分享获奖的喜悦有关。这些年来,我们仍然保持着密切的关系。通过不断学习，他获得了博士学位，并与大学女友建立了家庭。那个学期，我学到了更多的东西，而不仅仅是统计学分析和实验过程。他是我生活中的另类英雄，我的生活因他而面临挑战，因他而变得广阔。事实证明，他是正确的，我们成了终生的朋友。
