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18、火车赛跑的部分都能体现出“王子”的淘气可爱，将这些地方认真读一读，体会体会，再与同学交流。,绿色圃中小学教育http:/www.LSPJY.com,绿色圃中小学教育http:/www.LSPJY.com,这篇文章的写作特点是：作者选取了教“王子”识字、“王子”和火车赛跑两个典型事例，想象合理，叙述有详有略，语言幽默、简练、充满童真。我们在作文时要善于学习作者的观察方法和写作方法，灵活运用到自己的习作当中。,习作例文：我家的小狗,小口诀,介绍动物有要点，外形习性是重点。描写特点抓外形，总分说明条理清；联系生活写习性，吃睡玩飞和叫鸣，生活细节要具体，写出特性有感情。,习作例文：我家的小狗,课堂练笔
19、,你养过小动物吗？你最喜欢什么小动物？说一说，写一写。,提示：观察要仔细，叙述要抓住特点，有详有略，表达出自己对小动物的喜爱之情。,习作例文：我家的小狗,我爱故乡的杨梅（原文略，见教材70-71页）,阅读指导,1.初读例文 思考：作者是从哪几方面来写杨梅的？2.细读例文 作者是怎样描写杨梅树的？用了什么写作方法？作者是怎样描写杨梅果的？从几个方面写了杨梅果的可爱？,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,阅读指导,3.总结写法 思考：作者为什么能把杨梅的形状、颜色、味道的特点写得具体生动呢？,观察五件宝：眼看、手摸、嘴尝、耳听、鼻闻。,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,例文分析,我爱故乡的杨梅从杨梅的形状、颜色、味
20、道等方面描述了故乡的杨梅，突出了它的可爱，表达了作者热爱故乡的思想感情。,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,例文分析,这篇文章的写作特点是：作者按杨梅的生长过程，由整体到部分，由表及里的顺序进行叙述，语言十分精练、简洁、朴实、亲切，是学生学习写作的一篇很好的范文。我们要善于学习作者的观察方法和写作方法，并学会运用在自己的习作中。,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,小口诀,介绍植物抓特点，枝叶花果样样全；一年四季顺序写，生长过程一条线。形状颜色和滋味，比喻拟人写有趣；联系生活述感受，描写细节有情趣。引用诗句来赞美，画龙点睛多趣味。,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,课堂练笔,用上观察五件宝进行观察一种水果，按一定顺序把
21、这种水果的形状、颜色、味道说清楚。,提示：要按一定的顺序说出水果的特点，表达出自己对这种水果的喜爱之情。,习作例文：我爱故乡的杨梅,这篇文章描述了杨梅树的美丽和杨梅的可爱。作者对杨梅的生长过程观察得非常仔细，描述得非常生动，让人读后对杨梅留下了深刻的印象；文中具体可感的杨梅，让人忍不住想亲自去品尝一番，文章字里行间洋溢着作者对故乡的热爱之情。,例文赏析,认真读课文，填写下面的表格，体会作者观察的细致。,习题解答,圆圆的，遍身生着小刺，成熟后刺变软变平。,先是淡红的，随后深红，最后几乎变黑的。果肉新鲜红嫩。,没有熟透时又酸又甜，熟透后甜津津的，略带点酸味,我们眼中的缤纷世界,习作内容,本次作文主
22、题是“我们眼中的缤纷世界”，把自己最近观察时印象最深的一种事物或一处场景写下来。,写法指导,第一步：审题写自己观察的一种事物或一处场景，写出自己在观察中的发现。第二步：立意养成勤于观察、善于思考的好习惯。第三步：选材可以写校内景物、家庭生活、动物的生活习惯、植物的生长特点等。,第四步：思路(以范文为例),含羞草,开头：发现问题（含羞草“不害羞”）,中间：解决问题（思考、查阅资料）,结尾：得到启发（要多观察、多学习）,第五步:方法运用说明、议论、叙述等表达方式，把内容写具体、写清楚。,含羞草,在我上学必经的小路旁，长着一株矮小的含羞草，它的茎纤细，叶子是羽毛状的。只要一碰它，它的叶子就会合拢，头
23、就会垂下，真有意思！上学、放学经过那里时，大家都争,小作者观察得很细致。,着去“羞”它。今天早晨，我又拨弄了它几下。奇怪，含羞草的叶子怎么没有合拢？大概是天气冷了吧。但是我立刻把这个想法否定了。记得几天前我在其他地方碰过一株含羞草，它的叶子很快就合拢了。这到底是怎么回事呢？我百思不得其解。,“羞”这个词用得好。“大家都争着去羞它”，也为下文“不羞”埋下了伏笔。,这一思考过程表现出小作者是个爱动脑筋的孩子。,放学回家，我找来一本关于植物的书查看，这才明白了其中的奥秘。原来含羞草的小叶柄、大叶柄与茎轴相连的地方叫叶枕，叶枕内部细胞含有水分，当我们碰叶片时，叶枕上部细胞内的水分便流到别的细胞空隙去，
24、叶枕上部就褶皱起来，于是，含羞草就出现了“害羞”的现象。但是，如果我们连续碰它，叶枕内的细胞液都流完了，来不及补充，就出现了“不羞”的情况。,没想到，一株不起眼的含羞草也蕴藏着如此有趣的科学知识。看来，我们平时还得多注意观察和学习啊！,结尾小作者的感叹起到了画龙点睛的作用。,总评：小作者对含羞草进行了仔细的观察，更难能可贵的是含羞草“不羞”的现象引起了小作者的思考，小作者还为此查找了资料。最后，小作者发出了“平时还得多注意观察和学习”的感慨，认识很深刻。,习作指导,怎样写好一处场景,交代场景发生的时间、地点。描述场景要抓住场景氛围和特点。对场景描述要抓住场景中代表性人物的神态、言行。描述场景要注意点面结合、详略得当。在描述中要表达出自己内心的感触。,习作指导,怎样写好一处场景,新年快到了，大家都开始准备年货。今天我们一家闲来无事也一块去逛集市，一走进集市我便眼花缭乱，到处张灯结彩，一种节日的气氛很快拥到我这里。商场的天花板上挂着一排排祝福语，许多商品也开始打折了。商场一楼商品很多：有各种各样鞋子，有时髦的衣服，有潮流的裤子，还有色彩鲜艳小饰品和包包。商场里人来人往，人群川流不息，人们正忙着选购自己满意的商品。,
